What is your brutally honest opinion?

I think if I read another poem about someone trying to kill themselves I'm going to slash my wrists. Why can't people write happy poems?! Just like most poems, I think you're trying to be too clever with your vocab and too "deep". It's not natural, it doesn't flow. Poetry is bloody hard, if it's not really good, it just sucks. I mean, she has the will of a bull, yet she kills herself? I don't think so. Hanging a fractured window sill? WTF is that? Desire mire out of life? WHAT?! Poems do need to make sense. The third paragraph is good (apart from the bull thing), the rest of it, imo, is pretty rubbish. I hope that was brutal enough for you.